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Today, a short, original poem written in rhymed couplets for a collection of poems about the moon that I once wrote. The collection remains unpublished, and I have to say that it's little wonder, since I cannot assert with a straight face that it breaks new poetic ground. As Karla Kuskin once said in a poem, "Write about a radish./Too many people write about the moon." (Of course, she proceeds to call the moon a radish, as you'll see if you follow the link.)

As I was driving home with S yesterday after picking her up at the gym, I was admiring the play of the setting sunlight on the tips of treetops and the way storm clouds were off to the north of us, when a bright edge seemed to cut its way out from behind the clouds, and lo, the nearly-full moon was there. And it reminded me of this little poem I'd written, and which I published here once before back in 2007:

Day Moon
by Kelly R. Fineman

On a walk the other day,
I didn’t know quite what to say.
Although it was still afternoon,
In the sky, I saw the moon.




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slatts
Jan. 29th, 2010 02:35 pm (UTC)
Loved that poet....
...named Kelly R. Fineman!

NICE!
kellyrfineman
Jan. 29th, 2010 06:51 pm (UTC)
Re: Loved that poet....
Thanks!
karen_edmisten
Jan. 29th, 2010 02:47 pm (UTC)
I like the discombobulation, and one can never have too much of the moon.
:)
kellyrfineman
Jan. 29th, 2010 06:52 pm (UTC)
Discombobulation is such a great word.
docstymie
Jan. 29th, 2010 03:18 pm (UTC)
excellent!

I love frigid, early mornings,
bitterly cold, but still, and seeing through the crystal clear sky, the moon not wanting to give way to that attention-whore sun.
kellyrfineman
Jan. 29th, 2010 06:52 pm (UTC)
Nice image!
boreal_owl
Jan. 29th, 2010 04:17 pm (UTC)
nice moon poem!
"Ditch the mooon!
Extole the radish!"
Poetic advice
that makes me saddish.

Edited at 2010-01-29 04:20 pm (UTC)
kellyrfineman
Jan. 29th, 2010 06:52 pm (UTC)
Re: nice moon poem!
Ha! Quite funny!
phoenixfirewolf
Jan. 29th, 2010 04:48 pm (UTC)
:) Thanks for sharing ^^ It's very foggy here, no day moon for us. Apparently we're supposed to have a very cool moon tonight though.
kellyrfineman
Jan. 29th, 2010 06:53 pm (UTC)
It looked quite full last night, but I think it might officially be tonight?
jamarattigan
Jan. 29th, 2010 05:14 pm (UTC)
Love your day moon poem -- I felt the surprise and wonder. :)
kellyrfineman
Jan. 29th, 2010 06:54 pm (UTC)
Thanks - a handful of the poems in that children's collection manage to do what I intended, and I think this is one of them.
reginaclarejane
Jan. 29th, 2010 05:20 pm (UTC)
Aw, this is lovely, Kelly- I've always been fascinated by the moon when it's still out in the day time- like it's being defiant or something... ;)
kellyrfineman
Jan. 29th, 2010 06:54 pm (UTC)
It does seem that way, doesn't it? Either that, or it's party crasher.
lorrainemt
Jan. 29th, 2010 05:47 pm (UTC)
Wonderful image, especially for us cloud-weary Oregonians.
Lovely little poem, and I agree, you can never have too much of the moon.
kellyrfineman
Jan. 29th, 2010 06:55 pm (UTC)
That was, of course, Karla Kuskin's underlying point - her poem is wonderful. Wonderfuller than my little ditty.
mlyearofreading
Jan. 30th, 2010 12:37 pm (UTC)
One of the hardest things for kids to understand about the moon is that it is NOT the definition of night! Most of them have never noticed that there are times during the month that the moon is visible in the day, and their schema of the way the world works is ROCKED when they see this for themselves! It's fun and sad at the same time to be present in a child's life at the moment when science replaces one of the myths/stories of young childhood. Your poem captures this moment!
kellyrfineman
Jan. 30th, 2010 03:43 pm (UTC)
I distinctly when that happened for me. I was about 4 or 5, and I rushed into the house to tell my mom that the moon was out in the daytime. I was completely flabbergasted about it!
p_sunshine
Feb. 1st, 2010 01:45 pm (UTC)
I wonder if this is a winter thing - seeing the moon during the day. It was quite bright this morning.
kellyrfineman
Feb. 1st, 2010 03:13 pm (UTC)
It has something to do with the proximity to the earth and it location in orbit, I think?
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