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Statues in the Park - a Poetry Friday post

My poetry sisters and I have our monthly poems up today. This month's challenge was to write any poem you want to the title "Statues in the Park", and I have to tell you that it didn't give me much guidance or speak to me in any particular way. I started thinking about various statues in various parks, and did online research where I found this cool sculpture park in Ireland called Victor's Way that has some really interesting statues that I'd love to see in person, but still . . . nada.

Which is when I remembered being young and playing a game with other kids in the park. And then this poem mostly wrote itself.

Statues in the Park
by Kelly Ramsdell

One with the power to stop,
one with the power to release,
all others quite willing
to stop when tagged,
to hold their position
as long as it took until they
were freed, or the game ended.

Who can forget freeze tag?
Who can remember
how to be released?


You can read the other poems here, which include further references to freeze tag (aka the "statue game") as well as to actual statues.

Tanita
Sara
Laura
Tricia
Liz

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TS Davis
Aug. 4th, 2017 03:32 pm (UTC)
And now I wonder...
...about those with the power to stop us, and our willingness to stand still for the process...

I like how a short, blank verse can still be a thinky poem.


lpsalas
Aug. 4th, 2017 09:26 pm (UTC)
RE: And now I wonder...
I really like this slightly more streamlined version, Kelly. It says a little bit less overtly, but it makes me think even more. Nicely done.
kellyrfineman
Aug. 4th, 2017 11:46 pm (UTC)
Re: And now I wonder...
Ditching the opening line and going right into the action was an editorial suggestion from Sara, and I really like the poem better this way - and it does what I wanted it to better.
kellyrfineman
Aug. 4th, 2017 11:46 pm (UTC)
Re: And now I wonder...
That was what I was going for - I'm glad it came across. We are all so willing to cede our power to others, aren't we? As if the power to alter our course/make our choices were theirs, and we need someone else's permission to make a move.
Mary Lee Hahn
Aug. 5th, 2017 12:02 pm (UTC)
Love the questions in the ending stanza. (And good to remember the power of just jumping straight into the action.)
kellyrfineman
Aug. 5th, 2017 10:02 pm (UTC)
My original draft had the "Who can forget freeze tag?" as a starter as well as at the end. Sara Lewis Holmes suggested leaving it off - SO much stronger that way!
Donna Smith
Aug. 7th, 2017 02:51 am (UTC)
I had no patience for freezing! Much rather be the one unfreezing others. Maybe that's why I became a teacher??
kellyrfineman
Aug. 8th, 2017 04:15 pm (UTC)
Sounds plausible.
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