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The Lai - a Poetry Friday post

This month, my lovely poetry sisters and I took on a form called the lai. It is an open form consisting of one or more nine-line stanzas. Each stanza follows the form of AABAABAAB, where each A line has 5 syllables, and the B lines have only 2 syllables.

I found this one challenging (as my poem illustrates), and the lines felt tight. It was super easy for this to get tight and trite fast. Without further ado, here goes:

When I start to write
in forms, I delight
in play
These short lines are tight
and the rhymes incite
dismay
I worry I might
lack the skill to write
a lai.

As day turns to night
turns to day, then night
to day,
I struggle. My plight
becomes dire. I fight,
I pray,
But try as I might
I just cannot write
a lai.

To check out my sisters' poems, you can go here:

Laura
Tanita
Liz
Tricia
Sara

Poetry Friday is being hosted by my lovely friends at A Year of Reading. You can get to the roundup by clicking the box below:




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( 6 comments — Leave a comment )
Liz Garton Scanlon
Dec. 1st, 2017 05:04 pm (UTC)
I love the meta-humor of these stanzas. It totally worked for me!
lpsalas
Dec. 1st, 2017 05:10 pm (UTC)
Heehee--I just think this is so clever, Kelly!
TS Davis
Dec. 1st, 2017 05:18 pm (UTC)
The lie is that the lai is simple...
This was a humorous and elegant way to say, "I can't do this crap." And yet, you DID!
There's a lesson hidden in there somewhere...
kaymcgriff
Dec. 2nd, 2017 06:27 pm (UTC)
Fun
I love the humor in these!
Sara Lewis Holmes
Dec. 3rd, 2017 03:22 pm (UTC)
Ha! You're a determined soul, Kelly. Thanks for sharing your struggles, and making us all laugh, too.
Mary Lee Hahn
Dec. 3rd, 2017 07:12 pm (UTC)
HA! One of my favorite forms/sub-forms: The "I Can't Write A ______" form!! Well played!
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