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"She walks on eggshells" - a Poetry Sister post

When we were deciding on our themes for this year, I tossed out a poem in the style of George Gordon, Lord Byron's "She walks in beauty", which begins "She walks in beauty, like the night". You can read the original here. It's a short poem - three stanzas of six lines each - and was allegedly written after Byron attended a party and met his cousin there. She was, at the time, in mourning for her husband - hence "like the night". He made an awful lot of assumptions about her internal state based on her pulled-together, likely serene appearance.

My version addresses what might have been going on with her before and after the party:
She Walks on Eggshells
by Kelly Ramsdell

I.

She walks on eggshells, tip-toeing
    her way through life, in hopes that none
will notice how she cannot bring
    herself to stand directly in the sun.
Her sole reward, a wedding ring
    that weighs her down so she can’t run.

II.

One minute more in this black dress
    Is more, she thinks, than she can bear.
Her cousin’s smiles cause her distress—
    He is enough to make her swear,
Though not out loud, of course. Useless
    to be female, she’s well aware.

III.

And now he’s published something new
    that raves about her peaceful mind,
her innocence. He has no clue
    that she is finally unconfined
by men: a widow, it is true,
    but one who cannot be divined.


You can find the poems by my poetry sisters at the following links:

Laura Purdie Salas with "She walks in glitter"
Sara Lewis Holmes with "Crede Byron"
Tanita Davis with "Daughters of Diogenese" &/or "Maat/Lady Justice"
Tricia Stohr-Hunt with an untitled poem about grief
Liz Garton Scanlon with "Mother Liberty"

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